Ka pai Estherbella! This is a solid piece of work here and I can tell you have done your research. You do a great job of putting what you have learnt into your own words which helps your personality really come through when writing. The summary you have written about Lionel Messie is your best paragraph in this piece of work. You have used a range of sentence starters so the paragraph flows nicely and it is written with formal vocabulary.
Be careful that you do not switch between formal and informal. If your piece of writing is informative (giving people information) it should be quite formal. e.g. instead of 'was a really famous' - 'was a very famous'.
I will go into a bit more depth on our next google meet. Well done Estherbella!
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ReplyDeleteThis is a solid piece of work here and I can tell you have done your research. You do a great job of putting what you have learnt into your own words which helps your personality really come through when writing.
The summary you have written about Lionel Messie is your best paragraph in this piece of work. You have used a range of sentence starters so the paragraph flows nicely and it is written with formal vocabulary.
Be careful that you do not switch between formal and informal. If your piece of writing is informative (giving people information) it should be quite formal. e.g. instead of 'was a really famous' - 'was a very famous'.
I will go into a bit more depth on our next google meet. Well done Estherbella!
Thank u so much for that wonderful comment and I will try do my best next time
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